If life was a musical,
Would I sing along?
Raise my voice and sing aloud
An undaunted song?
If life was a musical,
Would my songs be sad?
Or reflect the happy times
That made me feel glad?
If life was a musical,
What songs would I sing?
Songs with minor, mournful tunes,
Or with joyful ring?
If life was a musical,
Would I sing of God?
Or focus on the trifles
Like riches or pomade?
If life was a musical,
I would sing along:
A noisy and joyful sound
Turned into a song
I would sing songs of friendship,
Songs of tales abroad,
Of joys and hurts and healings;
I would sing of God.
A few of the stanzas seem to repeat the same basic thing, but I like the resolution. Funny, I think you should sing this!
ReplyDeleteWant me to write music for this? I can try...
ReplyDeleteThought about it again, and I think your mood isn't very stable. It keeps swinging from silly to spiritual and I don't think it really works.
ReplyDeleteBut the idea is cool. You should look into transitions if you want to keep the basic layout of this poem.
I would say that I know exactly what to fix, what doesn't fit the mood, and that I can fix it right away... except I can't write poetry... so... you may have to be more specific. I can see how some of them are lighter in feel, but I don't see the silliness.
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